While I was unable to post this week because of some finals, we do have a fun fantasy excerpt to read today! Sami P. submitted a short fantasy piece for us to critique and gave us simple instructions: be honest and be constructive. So feel free to comment on anything from her hook to her characters to her spelling. 🙂
Currently, the queue for posting critiques is as follows: readloveexpress, beforetheflames, and Sami P. I will post one a week on Saturday, but next week, I may post a second one on Thursday 🙂 If you could like to have your piece of writing critiqued, you can check out the rules and submit on this page.
Have a great weekend, and thanks for your comments on Sami’s piece!
That One Moment: Sami P.
Ari gazed up into the sky, watching the sun set. Fiery golds, violet hues, and rosy pinks danced in the sky, a beautiful display found only in the wild. Cassandra sat down on the log next to him, her wings fluttering in the breeze.
“Isn’t it beautiful?” She asked.
“Hm? Oh yeah, it is.” Ari replied. The fairy looked up in concern.
“Are you all right Ari? You seem…distracted.” Somewhere behind them Rowan started the fire, the sound of flint and steel ringing throughout the glade. The elf shifted uneasily.
“I…I don’t know.” They savored the silence for a moment, watching the stars slowly appear. Ari cleared his throat.
“Cass…could I ask you something?” She cocked an eyebrow.
“What is it?” The elf played with a small stone, twiddling it between his fingers.
“W-well, I was wondering if…” A bit of pink colored his cheeks as he trailed off.
“Yessss?” Cassandra leaned a little closer. There was a shy little smile on her face. He blushed harder.
“I was uh…wondering…if you like to-“
“What are you two lovebirds doing?” Rowan teased. Behind him the fire crackled cheerfully.
“Um…” Ari suddenly found the ground very interesting.
“THIS ISN’T WHAT IT LOOKS LIKE!!” Cassandra quickly got up, embarrassed.
“Alright.” The thief said, amused. He turned back to the fire, a large pot of water now over the fire. “Could you guys cut up some meat and vegetables? I think we all need a bit of hearty stew tonight.”